Written for: Carpe Diem #940, blossom
This technique, used by the two haikai schools in vogue in Basho’s time (Teimon School and Danrin School), was also utilized in English poetry, where it was also known as the “para-rhyme”. An example would be back – buck. This rhyming device had almost completely fallen out of practice in poetry but was recently revived in rap-music. An extension of this technique is still used in jokes. By taking a known phrase or cliché, and then changing one part of it, it is possible to express a new idea. Examples: “He who laughs last thinks slowest.” or “Change is inevitable, except from a vending machine”. Basho, by changing only one sound unit, was using the frame rhyme.
from Kyoto’s many houses
a crowd of ninety-nine thousand
© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)
Here is my attempt:
My, how he has grown, so fat in the waist.
A bird in the hand, involves much wriggling.
The early bird, gets sleepy more quickly.
The grass is always greener, when you spray paint it.