Some Metaphors

Written for:  dVerse Poets Pub – Meeting The Bar With Creative Metaphors
(posted by Bjorn)

“In the dictionary metaphor means a figure of speech in which a term or phrase is applied to something to which it is not literally applicable in order to suggest a resemblance.

The metaphor as a literary device is very much related to the simile, where the author use the figure of speech as a comparison rather than a direct image. The simile is more like a carbon copy than the original in my view.

Today I want you to:

Avoid similes, do not use the words “like” or “as”
Avoid cliches and idioms
The metaphor should be well-known and detailed

For instance Pablo Neruda use a salt rose instead of a rose, and “arrow of carnations” in his famous Sonnet XVII (yes I know that it’s a simile, but still the imagery goes way beyond any normal flowery language).

Another example of excellent metaphors is Tomas Tranströmer in his poem After a Death uses many metaphors to describe mourning. A snowy TV-picture, the drop of water on a telephone lines and pages torn from old telephone directories. Notice that the images are also exact and will put us right into the mind of the author.”

Here are some of mine:

Her face was a cracked mirror,
shards reflecting her seven years
of hard luck.

The drawers of his heart
held dreams never realized,
love unrequited. All knobs
were tightly fastened.

His rubber band arms stretched
around her waist,
and tightened.

About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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13 Responses to Some Metaphors

  1. Great metaphors! I especially like the one about the mirror.


  2. qbit says:

    “shards reflecting her seven years
    of hard luck.” is great.


  3. lillian says:

    Good ones! I especially like the first stanza 🙂


  4. I loved the chest of drawer metaphor… tight.


  5. jillys2016 says:

    Knobs tightly fastened… I know that person. Nice job!


  6. Colin Lee says:

    I admire the way you juxtapose textures with emotions — mirror shards vs hard luck, tightly fastened knobs vs unrealised dreams. Rather than leading into the abstract, the metaphors enhance the perception of realities. Some amazing poetic cinematography here.


  7. Frank Hubeny says:

    There is an ominous sense of further bad luck with those rubber band hands.


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