Flamboyant Flamingoes

Written for:  Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads – Fireblossom Friday:  Poetic Imagery
There are a lot of things that go into the construction of a good poem. The sheer beauty of the words and the way the sound when written skillfully, the energy behind those words, the message they carry, and the form of the poem–all these are important. But my text today, my dear amphibious flock, is poetic imagery.

Go over your poem and ask yourself, “Could I say this word, this phrase, this stanza, better?”   Okay, you rascally reptiles. Blow me away with your poetic imagery! 

Violet ribboned visions,
scarlet scattered feathers
and lithe limbs. They sway
in synchronized steps.

Sharp turns to latin beats,
heads swivel swift
and sure. A spinning wheel
of bejeweled threads.

Peacock plumage pirouettes,
envelops you in their world,
as they swirl to a still-life–
tango dancers.


About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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14 Responses to Flamboyant Flamingoes

  1. I love the wordplay and the alliteration in this piece….nice tongue twisters…….with delightful images. Very cool, Sara!


  2. Rommy says:

    Dance clothes are lovely things. I think I was drawn to bellydance because of the chance to gloriously outfit myself in shiny things


  3. qbit says:

    Oooh! Really nice!


  4. coalblack says:

    I never thought of flamingos as dancers before–I always picture them standing still or slowly high-stepping, but I like the idea of them dancing!


  5. kanzensakura says:

    Love your wordsmithing in this, all the alliteratives in this.


  6. Bright, bright, bright steps… singing in color. I like.


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