summer moon

Written for:  Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #26 – Revise That Haiku

nonchalantly pissing
off the side of the road
soaking the young weeds

© Santoka Taneda (1882-1940)

“In Zen Buddhism shying away from bodily functions means shying away from life and death. Shying away from the real truth. The above haiku falls under this category.This poem is important because to some extent the weeds are Santoka himself. One can still live even without pure water. Notice also the fate of these weeds–they are not on the path, the road to salvation, but are destined to be on the path’s edge. Could this be how Santoka saw himself? I think so.”

Here is the poem to revise:

the summer moon
there are a lot of paper lanterns
on the street

Masaoka Shiki

Here is my attempt:

on the street
pools of light shimmer and wink
summer’s moon

About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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