That Certain Scream

Written for:  dVerse Poets Pub – Haibun Monday  (posted by qbit(Randall)
One’s Self, En-Mass

Write a description of two or three tight paragraphs in which you describe one particular member or element of a set:

● one sparrow in a flock of sparrows
● one baby in a nursery of babies
● one fish in a barrel of fish
● one scream in a stadium of screams
● one somersault in a series of somersaults
● one Rockette in a chorus line of Rockettes

The challenge is to perceive the qualities of the group, and to distinguish what makes an individ​ual member of that group both a part of it and apart from it. What sets or groups can you observe directly or in your imagination? Aim for clarity and simplicity in your language.

The guitarists’s fingers intricately pick their way
to a crescendo, signaling end of song. On the final note,
screams, whistles, and yahoos reverberate ’round
the stadium–surround sound to the max. All concert goers
wound up and spiraling their energy, their appreciation
of the music. Deafening sound of hands clapping and feet
stomping add to the mix.

Then, as people are starting to sit back down, I hear
a last straggler. AAAAA! YOU ROCK MAN! AAAAA! Top
of his lungs, standing and swinging a red bandana.
Heads swivel. Seen and noted.

tree’s full autumn skirt
shriveled brown leaves, all scrunched
in midst, dazzling red leaf

About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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13 Responses to That Certain Scream

  1. qbit says:

    Sarah — loved this. Great image of the crowd creating a whole, then one individual emerging. And then the Haiku was excellent — echoed the narrative, and perfect classical rendering. Haibun at its best.


  2. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice how that straggler got attention with his praise.


  3. Grace says:

    Nice contrast of the crowd and the concert, versus the last straggler. Love the haibun specially the autumn’s full autumn skirt.


  4. V.J. Knutson says:

    There is always that one, isn’t there? I like how you tie him in with the “dazzling red leaf” in the haiku.


  5. merrildsmith says:

    So vivid. I’ve seen that guy! 🙂
    Nicely tied together with the haiku.


  6. Just Barry says:

    Loved this. Made me think of graduation ceremonies, where each graduate has their own unique cheering section and perhaps that one or two parents bursting with pride with the unique squeals of joy.

    I like the idea of a skirt of autumn leaves too.

    You rocked this. 🙂


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