A Rose Cut Down

Written for:  dVerse Poets Pub – Meeting The Bar:  “Creating Metaphor”  (posted by Bjorn)
“One of the most important things in poetry is the use of unique metaphors, and today I thought that we should work with them a bit.

Today I would like you to take words and things around you and try to equate them to something symbolic such as an emotion, or the description of a person.

To make them unique fill the imagery with descriptions. For example don’t just say a car but say a rusty yellow 1977 Volkswagen Beetle… Make them as rich and specific as you can.

When you have a few description try to equate them to something abstract such a sense of love or another person’s rage. You can also equate them to something hard to grasp in a person. Maybe your boss has axes in his mouth…”

Her velvety red rose
developed crystals
of ice. Silk abandoned
for cotton. Luminous
eyes became sliding
sheets of rain. Pain
entered her heart
and remained.


About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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4 Responses to A Rose Cut Down

  1. Rob Kistner says:

    Fascinating poem Sara. Personally, I would abandon silk for cotton everytime. Cotton is family, silk are friends. I see we both lived in Portland. After 25 years in the Rose City, my wife and I moved north to the Emerald city to be with our first and only grandchild Alec. I prefer Portland, but
    I love Alex… 🙂

    …rob from http://www.image-verse.com


  2. V.J. Knutson says:

    Nice imagery – effective.


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