candy apples

Written for:  Carpe Diem Weekend Meditation #96 Little Ones … Sedoka

Sedoka:

A Sedoka is an unrhymed poem composed of two katauta. A katauta has three lines with the syllable pattern 5-7-7 and is complete in itself and able to stand alone. A Sedoka therefore has the syllable count: 5-7-7, 5-7-7.

In order to be correct, each katauta must be able to be read independently, but also create a cohesive singular work in the Sedoka. Often a Sedoka will address the same subject from different perspectives.

An example:

dark clouds cloak the night;
chilly winds creak gnarled branches,
grasping as bony fingers.

disturbed raven squawks
at frightened children – screaming,
then laughing – they throw him treats

© James Dean Chase

“Here is a Sedoka I wrote several years ago:”

behind a veil of clouds
she hides her bright face
she … the queen of night’s sky

in the mirror she looks
at her once beautiful face
mother of two boys and girls

© Chèvrefeuille (our host)

Here is my attempt:

a candy apple
child’s first bite as it crackles
leaves red streaks on children’s lips

childhood nostalgia
she buys a candy apple
her tooth chips like when she fell

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About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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2 Responses to candy apples

  1. well done — the crackling bite, the glistening of that particular shade of red … oh the sweetness – and yes, the “dark side” …. of possible tooth chipping! Candy apples are so tempting and fascinating. But I have to admit, I think I’ve always preferred caramel apples. LOL 🙂

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