Written for: dVerse Poets Pub – Meeting The Bar: Critique and Craft (posted by Frank Hubeny) – Imitation Practice
“The prompt today is to identify some poetic technique, theme or style that you enjoy and would like to try yourself by imitating it. Let us know what it is you are trying to practice or imitate. Some of us may want to try imitating it ourselves after seeing what you find enjoyable in a poem.”
(Inspired by The Rubaiyat by Omar Khayyam)
The maple tree, grown so high
was home to many birds, and I
did love to watch them flutter.
Seemed that branches touched the sky.
One morning after storm, I uttered
a cry when I saw my tree cluttered
with fallen limbs, all broken.
I knew I’d soon see a woodcutter.
A sense of being heart-broken
came over me. The charcoal sky betokened
another day of gusty winds.
I would lose my tree; left words unspoken.
Very nice work! It flows just like Omar Khayyam’s poem.
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Thanks so much, Dwight.
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You are welcome!
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I agree with Dwight and enjoyed your version of the Rubaiyat.
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Thanks so much!
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Great use of the rhyme scheme, and the flow is lovely.
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Thanks, Sarah!
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Very nice remembrance of the maple tree and imitation of Omar Khayyam.
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Thanks, Frank!
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Ooooh, the Rubaiyat…that takes me back to English classes! Your Maple Tree poem is exquisite.
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Thanks so much, Avia!
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You’re most welcome! 🙂
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Joy and sorrow…life. (K)
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That about wraps it up. Thanks, K.
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I do like the form and the way you capture the sorrow of a lost tree.
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Thanks, Bjorn!
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Sad story of the. Maple tree. Well done
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Thanks, Bev!
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You capture sorrow and grief well at the loss of your friendship with the tree. I like how the sentence is finished on the next line. Words unspoken says so much…
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Thanks, Lisa. Unspoken words are more powerful.
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