“lovely sunset”

Written for:  Carpe Diem #1790 & 1791 (double episode)
Revise haiku – A Lovely Sunset

For this episode I love to challenge you to “revise” a haiku. That haiku is one by Matsuo Basho (1644-1694), the haiku-poet that I see as my master:

Lovely Sunset

A Lovely Sunset (photo © Hernan Pauccara)

in the twilight rain
these brilliant-hued hibiscus –
a lovely sunset.

© Basho

A wonderful haiku by the master.

fiery sunset
silver threads through twilight rain
flaming hibiscus

© Sara McNulty

#1791:  Soliloquy No Renga
The second episode I love to challenge you with is a Soliloquy No Renga, or a solo-renga. I will give you a haiku that you have to use as the starting verse (hokku) of your Soliloquy No Renga. For this kind of Renga you have to create at least a renga with six stanza and a maximum of twelve stanza. Your closing verse (ageku) has to close the “chain”.

Bare Branches

Bare Branches (photo© Floraandfauna(2)

Here is your starting verse (hokku):

I have chosen a haiku by Yozakura, the Unknown Haiku Poet, a beauty I think to work with.

hokku:

bare branches
a painting against the blue sky
leaves under my feet                                     © Yozakura

they crackle and crunch dryness
carpet that needs to be swept

winter blue sky
pale patches peek through bare limbs
color of coming snow

snow decorates branches
natural trim for a tree

chatter from tree top
sparrows and robins visible
perched on snowy cover

age-ku:

a still life holiday card
artists busy painting

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About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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