If You

Written for:  dVerse Poets Pub – Poetics:  Echo … echo … echo  (posted by Merrill)

“We usually think of an echo as a sound, but thoughts and memories echo, too. Christina Rossetti’s poem, “Echo,” is about memories echoing. She also repeats words so that they echo throughout the poem.

In another use of the word “echo,” John Porch’s villanelle, “Echo,” retells the myth of Echo and Narcissus. Again, the repetition of the villanelle form creates a sort of echo.

For those who love science and poetry or poetry about science—you might think about space. According to scientists, stars echo in light. That is incredibly poetic to me.

And science is full of echoes—there is also echolocation used by animals, such as bats and dolphins, and an echocardiogram that uses sound echoes to get pictures of the heart.

So, for today’s Poetics challenge, I’d like you to write something about echoes. You can write actual echo poetry—where you repeat the end word or syllable or echo sounds.

OR—you can write a poem about some sort of actual echoes.

OR –you write about the myth of Echo.

OR—you can combine any or all of these.”


If you were to kiss me,
press your lips to mine
I would not mind.

If you were to embrace me,
hug my body to yours
I would not mind.

If you were to whisper,
tickle my ear with sweet sounds
I would not mind.

If you were to leave me,
walk out of my life
I would mind.


About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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13 Responses to If You

  1. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like the way you presented the contrast in the last stanza with the nearly repeating lines.


  2. hank77 says:


    If you were to leave me,
    walk out of my life
    I would mind.

    True love runs deep. It is just that many take it for granted or take it lightly!



  3. And you should mind, given that you look forward to the other things 🙂


  4. merrildsmith says:

    Short and sweet–a nice repetition and contrast. Thank you for echoing with me!


  5. lynn__ says:

    Understated emotions make an effective love poem 🙂


  6. You would mind
    and it wouldn’t be kind


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