Written for: Carpe Diem Exploring The Beauty Of Haiku #1828 Baransu (balance)
“For this episode I challenge you to create a haiku with the so called “baransu” (balance) haiku writing technique. Let me explain the “baransu” technique in short. As you maybe know we are familiair with the Tan Renga, the two stanza Renga, in which we try to create the second stanza through association on the scenes in the first stanza.
With the “baransu” technique we are doing the same thing, but than through association on the separated lines of the haiku. With the “baransu” technique we can bring balance in our haiku.”
Let me give you an example:
‘a walk through the city’ … in this line we see already a few possible things to associate on e.g. “walk” and “city”. I have chosen to use “walk” to associate on.
‘step by step I discover’ … in this line the possible associations can be on “step” and “discover”. I have chosen to use “discover” and came to this third line:
‘a newly built world’
Let me bring the three lines to each other, than the following haiku will be formed:
a walk through the city
step by step I discover
a newly built world
© Chèvrefeuille (our host)
Here is my attempt:
thunderstorm strikes
lightning flashes purple streaks
across the dog’s back
Nicely done, Sara!
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Thanks, Kim!
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This has a nice twist to it.
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Thanks, Ken!
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Love this one.
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Thanks, Cressida!
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I can almost feel the lightning raising the hair on the dog’s back. Well done!
~Cie from Poetry of the Netherworld~
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Thanks so much, Cie!
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