baransu (balance)

Written for:  Carpe Diem Exploring The Beauty Of Haiku #1828 Baransu (balance)

“For this episode I challenge you to create a haiku with the so called “baransu” (balance) haiku writing technique. Let me explain the “baransu” technique in short. As you maybe know we are familiair with the Tan Renga, the two stanza Renga, in which we try to create the second stanza through association on the scenes in the first stanza.

With the “baransu” technique we are doing the same thing, but than through association on the separated lines of the haiku. With the “baransu” technique we can bring balance in our haiku.”

Let me give you an example:

‘a walk through the city’ … in this line we see already a few possible things to associate on e.g. “walk” and “city”. I have chosen to use “walk” to associate on.
‘step by step I discover’ … in this line the possible associations can be on “step” and “discover”. I have chosen to use “discover” and came to this third line:
‘a newly built world’
Let me bring the three lines to each other, than the following haiku will be formed:

a walk through the city
step by step I discover
a newly built world

© Chèvrefeuille (our host)

Here is my attempt:

thunderstorm strikes
lightning flashes purple streaks
across the dog’s back

About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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8 Responses to baransu (balance)

  1. kim881 says:

    Nicely done, Sara!


  2. rivrvlogr says:

    This has a nice twist to it.


  3. Cressida says:

    Love this one.


  4. Cara Hartley says:

    I can almost feel the lightning raising the hair on the dog’s back. Well done!
    ~Cie from Poetry of the Netherworld~


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