Innocents

Posted on September 9, 2020 by 
Written for:  Go Dog Go Cafe - Tuesday Writing Prompt 
(with Beth and Amanda)

"Write a piece of poetry that ends with, 'in the end,
we were just a moment'."

Starting out fresh, 
we thought romance 
would last forever.
Innocent, we could not
foresee change.  Yet
it came sweeping in
like a magician's 
wand.  In the end,
we were just a moment.

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I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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8 Responses to Innocents

  1. Mike Bayles says:
    September 9, 2020 at 1:21 am

    This is a sad, but nice poem, Sara. I like it.

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  2. Stine Writing says:
    September 9, 2020 at 1:30 am

    Nice job on that one! That is sort of “so specific” that it seems like it is going to be difficult. I will attempt it, however…

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  3. Jordan Hoggard says:
    September 9, 2020 at 7:32 am

    Excellent. It feels like a Rebel haiku that Started serious weightlifting and GREW to beast level size. Powerful. And, the flow. It felt like a short short movie where I dropped into a single, curved scoop of s set of rapids and was beautifully spit out in the pond below in seconds flat. Took all the sadness and experience and gave it a wonderful perspective.

    “Yet it came in sweeping like a magician’s wand. In the end, we were just a moment.” That is truly powerful, muscular language. Such supple and strong wordplay building up to the finish. The way you tenured the feeling, the last line has that quality of also a knowing and wise and higher octave perspective looking back that viscerally learned from the experience, and sees the whole picture… and there isn’t a bitter word in the lot.

    This piece is an elixir in itself.

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  4. Magaly Guerrero says:
    September 9, 2020 at 4:05 pm

    Change does that, doesn’t it? Bursts into our lives, and takes over whatever it needs, not even caring to shout “Ready or not!”

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