New Adventure

Posted on October 23, 2020 by 
Written for:  dVerse Poets Pub
Meeting The Bar:  Let Your Words Ring Out  (posted by Peter Franks)

"Write a poem with focus on sounds."


She steps over jagged jewels
fronting the sea.  Climbs
on clumsy feet, shaking
the sails of the boat
as she settles in.  Sun's
rays slant, striping
boat.  Breezes waft
through her short, wavy
hair.  How ecstatic
she is to try something
new at an age when risks
are rarely taken.

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About purplepeninportland

I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York. My goal is to create and share poetry with others who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve in you, and feel your sparks as well.
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14 Responses to New Adventure

  1. peterfrankiswrites says:
    October 23, 2020 at 12:36 am

    I was just reading something which started ‘How can I learn to be more adventurous when I find new things so frightening? The essence of the answer was the doing seems to be thing that shapes or re-shapes our fears (rather than the fears in our heads determining what we can & can’t do). Your poem is a great example – here she is climbing over ‘jagged jewels’ on ‘clumsy feet’ and lo, there’s ecstasy at the new thing, the risk taken. And lovely sounds here too…’sun’s rays slant striping the sails’ . Terrific stuff – thank you.

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  2. Stine Writing says:
    October 23, 2020 at 2:09 am

    That is beautiful!

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  3. msjadeli says:
    October 23, 2020 at 5:37 am

    What a wonderful leap forward, sounds like sailing ❤ Great imagery and happy for you, Sara!

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  4. kim881 says:
    October 23, 2020 at 8:12 am

    Nice use of alliteration, Sara!

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  5. Misky says:
    October 23, 2020 at 11:28 am

    Yes, I understand this completely.

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  6. Dora says:
    October 23, 2020 at 4:15 pm

    Beautifully articulated. I can feel her excitement in the face of “jagged jewels fronting the sea”: what an exquisite turn of phrase!

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  7. sanaarizvi says:
    October 25, 2020 at 3:23 am

    Love this! Such a gorgeously tantalizing opening line to this poem, Sara! 😀

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