Written for: Friday Writings #25 - Let's Rewrite
(posted by Magaly)
"I would like you to take a poem or story you wrote many years ago (preferably, one that wasn’t exactly awesome), and rewrite it. Please post both the original and the edited versions."
on top shelf,
a crystal blue
Stars of ice
fir tree branches
like silver garland
topping. Fine layer
of white sand
where green sea
peaks through. All
dreams are looked
upon fondly by
a smiling moon.
OldIn My Dream Jar
Posted on October 28, 2015 by purplepeninportland
Written for: Margo Roby’s Poem Tryouts, “If You Could Imagine Day”
Say we live in a time where you can order your own pillar of setting. What would you choose to have depicted in your pillar?
Or, if you want to feel cosier about it, how about a jar you can place on a shelf.
Center stage–sand and ocean
in constant motion. Moon’s face
winking among abstract
configuration of shimmering
stars, above. On lower
level, sunflowers bowing
in bloom. To round out
my dream jar, a border
of lilac feathers floating.
I am a freelance poet, born and bred in Brooklyn, New York. I live with my husband, John, and two charming rescue dogs–Marion Miller and Murphy. We spent eight lovely years in Portland, OR, but are now back in New York.
My goal is to create and share poetry with others
who write, or simply enjoy reading poetry. I hope to touch a nerve
in you, and feel your sparks as well.